My Fanfic project for BSG '03

[Expatkiwi]

For the last couple of years, I've been writing a series of stories about the Battlestar PEGASUS, and merging it in the best that I can with the current story. Thanks to plot twists and changes, I've made my PEGASUS into Helena Cain's predecessor battlestar, which was due to be taken out of commission just after the GALACTICA. The commander of my PEGASUS is Helena Cain's cousin Garris Cain. The first stories were written before Helena Cain came on the scene. People who read my stories urged me to keep it going.

Anyway, the story seems to be reasonably well-received, and while not in the class as the excellent fanfic titled "Going Native" (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3396972/1/Going_Native) by RAP541, I'm not displeased with how the series has been progressing.

I'd like you folk to take the time to read through them and to give me your opinions and suggestions as to how to develop it further. My profile (and fanfiction listings) can be visited at http://www.fanfiction.net/u/883332/Expatkiwi

[Kregano]

I've got some minor nitpicks that I've had since I first read your stories on Galactica.tv's fanfic section:
-Comscan. I know it's supposed to do everything DRADIS does, but I don't think you've ever mentioned dradis itself.
-Core command. Isn't it the same thing as Flight Ops?
-The Warbook. Something just bugs me about it (maybe it's the name or the fact that the pilot would have to look at a panel instead of keeping their eyes open).
-Having the names of ships in all caps (outside of Cylon messages).
-Railguns and the lack of Heavy Raiders (unless they've popped up in later books- I've got a lot of catching up to do).

Stuff I liked:
-The battles.
-The characters.
-The misinformation campaign with the Vipers.
-The fact that Colonials use guns that likely don't resemble real ones.
-The story.